Alright then here goes. *cracks knuckles*
I would suggest that you shorten the second line, Take a word or two out of that sentance. Its messing with the flow of your poem with it longer than all your other ilnes. You should also change gentile to gentle. If that is a spelling mistake. Also the exclamation points are awkward at the end of these sentances. They don't belong there. I would suggest commas instead. Other than this I can't find anything wrong with it. It's a sweet little poem about nature. Good luck with your writing.
~Kaylyn
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